Like you noted earlier, some of it does feel quite distant from Tracker—I think this comes from the extra narrative ‘layer’, i.e. we are being told a story; we’re not experiencing it at the same time as Tracker. The prose did a good job of letting the reader interpret Tracker’s actions/emotions for themselves, although this also contributes to the distance between Tracker and the reader because it takes a while to find a ‘way in’ to his emotions.
My opinion went back and forth about the long stretches of dialogue—sometimes I found them immersive, other times the conversations felt overly ‘constructed’, although perhaps this is another side effect of the whole storytelling construct. What did you think?