Jake, we must have been posting at the same time (see my “let’s circle back to the prose” post). The inconsistency irritated me.
And the dialect in general (“ya’re too old to play ‘splorers”) was over-the-top. A little is fine to suggest dialect but this really interfered with my ability to read. (Reminded me in parts of Wuthering Heights, those passages where the dialect is nearly impenetrable). (Not a compliment.)